Tuesday, April 26, 2011

THE MINE


While in the desert,
I stumbled into a mine shaft.
Even in its depleted state,
I found hidden riches…
Once I survived the fall.

In this place of Death and
Wait,
Sight is not given but
Created.

While in the desert,
I stumbled into a mine shaft.
In this gaping tomb,
I found a chance to go forward and a
Way back home.


-For One Shot Wednesday http://onestoppoetry.com/

Two news pieces inspired this poem.  One was the story of a miner who fell into a Nevada mine and died there after many failed attempts to save him. The other was a report about how scientists study mines for clues about the earth’s beginnings and life on other planets.

10 comments:

  1. Sharing the stories of your inspiration really adds depth to an already good poem. Nicely done.

    Teresa

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  2. The "Wait" turning point is very effective after mentioning it as a place of death. I'm surprised you were able to pull the poem out of such a depth of despair by finding optimism at the end. Well done.

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  3. intriguing take what richness might be found in an accident as opposed to the death the man found..or maybe in that he found his riches...i like this...

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  4. Despair and then lifted spirit...love it.

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  5. This piece could easily describe the sensations of one who experienced a near-death experience and lived to tell about it.
    Her is my One Shot:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/27/mourning-melody/

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  6. I see hope in the end...Like that!!

    Here is my one shot:
    diamonte

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  7. dark. and yet not. I'm both pleased and amazed how well you've managed to create hope from finality :)

    Monty

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  8. Thank you all for your encouraging comments. Literally and metaphorically, this accident and its aftermath moved me. However, I wanted to make sure that I was respectful to the memory of the victim.

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  9. Death and Life in the poem as hope and despair

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